Burried Alive!
I felt it,cold like stone breathing on my neck. I couldn’t move a muscle,this can’t be real, a dozen faces before me. I’m not dead! I can’t get out of this casket im trapped. HELP ME!, I screamed. No answer. I can’t believe this, im being burried alive. Chills run up my spine. My bones aching from the pain. How did I get here? Am I being punished?
I heard men talking outside they brought up the word murder. My heart dropped, How could I be here if I was murdered. I tremble at the thought. Who would wanna murder me? Im burning up in here I can’t breathe. I scream again! But nothing. I start to hear a crackling sound beside me it was as if someone were laying there. I looked over and saw a little tiny black chip. Could it be a voice detecter?
About that time I heard a mans voice on the other side saying “They can’t hear you meagen,GIVE UP NOW!”.I didnt recognize the voice. Who was this? Wha’t did they want from me? HONK! I woke up to the sound of the school bus, I had been dreaming. I walked silently out the door my mom kissed me bye. I was halfway down the side walk when my mom asked, ” What’s this black chip attached to your shirt?”.
To be continued…..
Nice Story !
I think the story flowed
really good ! I wonder
why was the black chip attached
to her if she was DREAMING !
Mhm , got’s me questioning which is Good ! (:
Ta-Layzaa
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:29 amthis is the best short stroy ive ever read …which i never read but its good… i love the end of it ..
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:33 amI agree with Ta-Layza It flowed really well. And what would you do if you were traped like that?
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:34 amthis was a good story line i like it
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:37 ami think you should do a part 2
Haha, thanks you guys!
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:41 am@Ta-Layza- You will find that out in part 2(:
Ohh I loved it hehehe It kept me going I liked the last part.
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:50 amThe story was really good.You made the ending suspenceful for the reader so that people can look forward to the next post. What’s going to happen next? What is the black chip anyway?
Posted April 14, 2011, 11:55 amHaha, when I write my next post y’all will find out(:
Posted April 14, 2011, 12:12 pmWow allison you made this blog sound really good and you made me want to read more as I went along to the story the ending was very very good, but then you ended it with whats that device attached to your shirt that made me want to keep reading. I cant wait til you make the next blog:)
Posted April 14, 2011, 4:10 pm-lorenzo
Yo…Yuhh think yuhh a rapper huh?
i like that part where you was like cold stone breath on my neck…yo that go so hard in the paint well not really lol jkjkjk
go comment on my blog too aliskin
Posted April 14, 2011, 4:11 pm